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[Disclaimer, please read the description before you read this poem, it shows how you're supposed to read  this piece, thank you]

We log on-check-check-check-checking over FaceBook-
Click-click-click-click-clinkin' all the updates-
(Scroll-scroll-scroll-scroll-scrolling on the blogs again)
            This is the new society

ten-fifty-seventy-ninety-over hundred friends online
three-twenty two-hundred nine the month before
(Scroll-scroll-scroll-scroll-scrolling on the blogs again)
            This is the new society

Block-block-block-block-all of the pornography
(Scroll-scroll-scroll-scroll-scrolling on the blogs again);
Minds-minds-minds-minds being trapped again
            An' this is the new society

beg-beg-beg-beg for something new again
give-give-give them something to shut them up
(Scroll-scroll-scroll-scroll-scrolling on the blogs again)
            This is the new society

Tap-tap-tap-tap until controller wears out again
If-you-get-up-this chance will never come again
(Scroll-scroll-scroll-scroll-scrolling on the blogs again)
            This is the new society

We-don't-need-much-social activity outside these walls
And-and-and-and-we gather all of our online popularity
Scroll-scroll-scroll-scroll-scrolling on the blogs again
            An' this is the new society

The-Sounds-of-SOPA being banned again
And days-go-by-faster than the usual
Scroll-scroll-scroll-scroll-scrolling on the blogs again
            This is the new society

I-have-been-more-exposed then ever before
This-is-the-big-social media that is destroying the youth!
Scroll-scroll-scroll-scroll-scrolling on the blogs again
            This is the new society



allpoetry.com/poem/8445289-Boo… (open this first then listen to the youtube audio and read along. PLEASE DON'T LISTEN FOR 2 HOURS)
youtu.be/Glcg95L4JK4

this was back in 1915 in WWI. They played this during the trench wars. 
It would loop for days, weeks, months. 
So I decided to modernize it. This is byfar the hardest poem I've ever written. Enjoy...

A DD??? HOLY ROURIETEROUTQWERNWERNOFDDSNDD>NLERJTNEWROTUQEROWOUqWN THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! OMGOMGOMGOMMGOMGOMGOmMGOMG
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Given 2013-11-24
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Genisay Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It seems this is so true, right?  I can only wonder about people younger then I am that are completely obsessed with the internet, and never even think about doing things elsewhere.  I can get sucked into it once in a while, and spend the better part of a day browsing....but in my case, some of that also comes from never having money to really go do anything else. I some times ride my bike into the city proper, or to a shopping are where I live, and just window shop, but even then, I'm faced with the fact that if I go out for more then a few hours, I will have to spend money on eating out. But even then, once I've caught up on what I consider to be business online, I can get bored with it.  That is usually when I go on cleaning sprees. (Can't afford to go out *sigh*, internet has nothing interesting *sigh*I've already read all of these books.....cleaning time!)

Some how though, I've never fully gotten into the idea of being completely surrounded by the internet all of the time. When I leave my apartment, I do bring my phone, but usually it's a book on my phone I am reading, not the internet. I don't really have too many sites I am interested in visiting on my phone. I do however enjoy having a mobile google in my pocket for the cases where I need to look something up, or have a random blast of inquisitiveness on a topic.

And I still get excited by the prospect of going out with friends or....spending a three days, with out the internet at all, out in the woods at an old military fort, using my imagination with other people to make up fantasy stories! Whoo!
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Well didn't expect that XD
Thank you for the comment Cx
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Genisay Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh, haha.  Sorry, I can kind of ramble some times I guess. ^.^
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Lol that's fine. Please help yourself.
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Lucain24 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
lol no no, that's not what the object is xD
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Orionnator Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Well that's what I was trying to get across...
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Ah. Alright then.
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Lucain24 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3 well thanks a lot! That means a lot coming from you. C: I would try that, I do it all the time when I'm alone, just never recorded it xD
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:+fav:

hi! i hope you don't mind my humble feature:
your lovely piece is handpicked. (link)

thank you.
:iconbluedancingflower:
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you :aww:  
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you too. this is for you: :iconwineplz: in celebration of your art.
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol I don't drink, XD but I'll take a soda o3o/
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oopps, sorry. how about :pepsi: and :iconpizzasliceplz:?
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sounds good! XD
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!
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Babou-Shka Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013
Very well done, great idea!
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!!
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:iconbabou-shka:
Babou-Shka Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
You're welcome :)
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Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!!
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Serenesouls27 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome ^^
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Maple-Thief Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Why not? o.o Why can't we listen for two hours?
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It causes PTSD. And I don't want that XD
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WaterLily-Gems Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Student General Artist
This is incredible. The way you've translated it into "modern" language is just brilliant. Very well done, and truly deserving of a DD, congrats :)
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you sooo much!!
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WaterLily-Gems Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Student General Artist
My pleasure :aww:
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!
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Franz32 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The truths man... dem truthful feels. I like this a lot, great job!
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Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!
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DanSyron Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013
told ya it was good when you had me review it man.
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Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
DAN!! XD Omg XD
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diphylla Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Congrats :D
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Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thankies!!!*-$?18-)/!:"-!/
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DarkAcey Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoa... I'm left breathless. I'm a tad bit obsessed with the WWII era, and I've never heard of 'Boots' before. It put me right on the battlefield. It gave me a similar sense of awe as Charlie Chaplin's speech from The Great Dictator, but helped put into perspective how the soldiers felt. 

Reading your poem, I felt these things again, but for my own society. Never have I felt as struck by my own time as I have now. I thank you for giving me the chance to reflect on it. 
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Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're indeed welcome! Thank you for the kind words!! 
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is brilliant. (also that youtube link is brilliant as well)
i suppose that with more technological advances we loose attachment to reality, even our daily jobs are becoming more computer oriented. social interaction face to face is dwindling, more and more people are living two separate lives, one in reality one on the internet. 
a price we pay for technology i guess? 

congrats on a well deserved dd :clap: 
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ManboobLover69 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
I FOUND YOU

THIS IS INSANE.
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
NECRO! :nuu:OMG - Watch that
 
and i was trying to hide so well 
OMG ONOZ Emoticon 
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ManboobLover69 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Hehehehe!!! :icongrinstareplz: NOBODY CAN HIDE FROM ME.
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:nuu:
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Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
AH! Thank you!! Thank you so much for the praise!!! ;A;
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
most welcome :huggle:
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DalailamaNYF Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Student
SOPA will take over eventually, the Gov rule the outside walls, they will rule the inside walls too. 
Anyway, nice poem. 
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Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :thanks:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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:iconlucain24:
Lucain24 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU!!!! <3
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